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:iconstarhavenstudios:
Ah, a nice poem of hope and wishes. It's a nice creative approach to a damsel-in-distress, waiting for her knight in shining armor. Or, at least, a hopeful waiting for a miracle to arrive.

I think, in order to bring more impact to this poem, you should elaborate on these dreams. Don't be afraid of bringing concrete ideas. For example, her unnamed knight could be her best friend or a prince she remembered in a fairytale she heard long ago. Her hope could be a little house with the red door, with a family she would raise living in it.

Your poem is very sweet, and I hope you continue writing more.
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:iconanemoneinthesky:
AnemoneInTheSky Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, thank you so much. I guess I just got scared writing this. >.<
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:iconstarhavenstudios:
starhavenstudios Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't be scared writing this. You wrote a good poem, but you can also write better.
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